dickdona
You are too eager to get all your ideas finished. You don't play around with your themes and instruments to make it more interesting. You think linear at the moment but you need to try oblique! Switch the theme to the base occasionaly; Add a higher instrument intermittantly; don't be so obvious with your cadences etc etc. Play around with the themes you've got.....

 Corinne777
i like it. if you added lerics that changed alot through the song with a choir and the orchistra part it would be even better. love it!

 Corinne777
i like it. if you added lerics that changed alot through the song with a choir and the orchistra part it would be even better. love it!

 zerf50
i like it very good!

 germancello
Its good but more strings would have helped it along

 SailorV
It was somewhere between The Godfather and shoot the duck and win a prize at the carnival. But I still liked it.

 The-Amazing-Musician
I loved it! Great job!