I don`t think I spelled critique correctly.. anyways! Hi ya`ll! I have this friend who plays piano, and I`ve been encouraging him to play more than what his teacher gives him, and tostart playing by ear and have fun n all that. Well! He has created his very own little melody, or first composition you might say. I think it`s pretty good! I was wondering if you all would give your piano-educated opinions and critique on his first piece! Just so he can hear what other piano players have to say about it, and maybe he`ll continue experimenting with composing! Thankyou for any suggestions/replies that may come!

Jade

HAHAHA! I almost forgot the link. *snorts* Here:

http://evenstar.netfirms.com/short%20and%20simple.zip

It sounds nice, I think he should extend it a little bit and put some trills in it

Not bad at all for his first piece! Kudos from me. Its a good base, from there he could perhaps come up with a variation or two... And I agree with Steve that he should lighten it up a bit with some trills or passing notes or something. But on the whole, VERY COOL!!!

i like the harmony, almost sound like it could have been derived from one of chopin`s nocturnes. Variations and elaborations would make it a bit more engaging, but an otherwise good peice of work. How old is the composer, just out of curiosity? I compose occasionally, usually for school based competitions (to win money), and I am working on a piano peice right now.

oh by the way, how do you record a song and put it onto the computer and in the internet? I want to do that.

That was good, I agree with the other two about putting more into it like ornaments on a Bach piece. Also, right now it`s one note at a time in the right hand and same with the left. Try experimenting with another note in each hand (like thirds, fifths etc.) Really good for a first piece!

Very nice. Is this some kind of nocturne?

The following is pure opinion so plz don`t flame me.
Consider revising the pedal a bit. It blurs some places.
Left hand...umm...may be too simple compared to the right hand, and also too many left-hand-notes per right-hand-note.

Gosh I wish I could edit posts.

I wouldn`t like ornaments on that piece. It sounds to me like he`s aiming for a Chopin-isch sound (If he`s not then I dunno) and trills and ornaments wouldn`t help.

Very good for Opus 1 though.

can someone answer that question I posed earlier in this thread? lol, i don`t want to be annoying but I really want to know how to put music on to the internet.

Thankyou all for the replies! The composer is 19 years old, and he records the music onto the computer using a mic, an electric piano, and a program called Magix. You can do alot of neat things with the program like mixing or altering the sound or whatever. Thanks again for all the suggestions! I believe he did an alteration of it, and I`ll post the link here once we get it uploaded. *waves*

I think the melody is very nice but honestly the song needs more ornaments to keep it more interesting. Good job though! Keep on going!

one thing i think should be added is at the very end where their is those two notes before that kind of arpeggio ending.those two notes i think should be played twice and then the arpeggio ending.but i think it sounds very very good over all